2011年5月18日 星期三

contrasting-2

     I think Debra Fines can be fit to this job because of several reasons. One of the reasons is that Debra has more education than Lynn. It means that Debra has more knowledge to support his teaching. Another reason is that Debra varies in his teaching experience while Lynn has less teaching experience. Debra has been a consultant and author, an instructor, a teaching assistant, and a swimming teacher. However, Lynn has just been a Spanish teacher, an English teacher, and a peace crops volunteer. Moreover, Debra has gone to three universities for studying, but Lynn only has studying in one college. Although Debra doesn’t reap any reward like Lynn does, his resume proved that he is qualified to assume the position. If I am the boss, I will prefer Debra to Lynn.

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  3. 你的標題打錯了,這篇應該是contrasting
    和第一篇標題相反

    proved that he is qualified to...前面是過去式後面是現在式時態亂了

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  4. 開頭很直接 可以描述一下
    eduation可以這樣用嗎!?
    Debra varies in his teaching experience (varies !???)
    I will prefer Debra to Lynn(這樣寫怪怪的吧!!)

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  5. I think Debra Fines can be fit~ fit好像沒有在用被動可能要查一下

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  6. 你標題打錯了~
    *I think Debra Fines can be fit to this job because of several reasons.這句錯了吧?改成I think Debra Fines is fit to ~。
    * If I am the boss, I will prefer Debra to Lynn.
    這句結論句很怪,因為題目說"你"要請一個English instructor所以你就是哪個Boss了阿~,再說如果你不是這位boss也要用與現在事實相反的假設與汽吧?也應該改成If I "were" the boss, I would ~.而後面那句改成I prefer hiring Debra to Lynn會比較好巴?!
    *一開始可以加一下情竟...

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  7. 開頭要鋪陳一下~
    Debra是女的吧!!!
    Debra has been a consultant and author, an instructor, a teaching assistant, and a swimming teacher. However, Lynn has just been a Spanish teacher, an English teacher, and a peace crops volunteer.
    這句跟你要找老師好像沒關係~
    加個解釋說因為Debra的工作經驗多,能使教學更活潑等等之類的理由~不然怪怪的~

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