Many students have to wear uniform to school every day. In fact, a lot of students don’t like to do that because they think it comfortable to be in sports clothing. Even they are not fond of the design on the uniform. On the contrary, parents think it good for children to wear uniform. Dressing in uniform means discipline. Moreover, those who are dressed in uniform will pay attention to their behavior. I consider that wearing uniform is a better way to confine students’ bad deeds. I don’t dislike to dress in uniform. Besides, we can prevent people we don’t know from entering the school if students dress themselves in uniform. Although lots of students hate to wear uniform, dressing in uniform is what students have to do. Change the ideas, and students will feel better.
是Dressed in唷!還有倒數第二句也是
回覆刪除dress oneself才用主動
I don’t dislike to dress in uniform突然插這句進來感覺很奇怪
In fact, a lot of~they think it comfortable to be in sports clothing.後面那邊 it is more comfortable to ~或改成they think wearing sport clothing is more comfortable.
回覆刪除Dressing in uniform -> Dressed in uniform
I don’t dislike to dress in uniform. 雙重否定!?
回覆刪除dress themselves in (錯搂)
Change the ideas, and students will feel better.(這句是什麼意思!?)
*開頭可以寫I am in favor~/I agree that~之類的句型(可以在參考金龍的講義)表示自己的意見。
回覆刪除*~they think it comfortable to be in sports clothing. →they think it is more comfortable to wear sports clothing.
*I don’t dislike to dress in uniform.妳要表示什麼?是打錯ㄇ?而且你突然冒一句跟前面沒甚麼關係的句子有點怪...
*最後一句好像有點中文式英文耶~
*這篇是要表示你對此題目的看法與立場,是贊成還是反對,可是從第一個論點看來,感覺你是描述普遍學生跟家長想法,我認為你應該從"我"出發會比較好...
uniform要用複數比較好喔!
回覆刪除I don’t dislike to dress in uniform.這句很奇怪~妳是在寫穿制服的好處~所以妳的立場應該是說穿制服是件好事~可是妳又說妳不喜歡穿制服~互相矛盾喔!
這篇文章的順序有點奇怪~跳來跳去的~我覺得先寫事實~再去說明妳自己的立場這樣比較文章會比較順~
還有~父母覺得學生穿制服比較好~這裡也怪怪的~穿制服跟父母好像沒關係~
上面的人講的很多了
回覆刪除我就不打了