2011年3月2日 星期三

A Dream I Have Had

     A dream that I have had was that we drove in the highway. Suddenly, our car shook a bit and then we thought something must be on our car, but we didn’t know what the thing was. We decided to look up and afterward we found a monster was on our car, trying to attack our car! I felt scare. My father decided to climb out of the car to fight with the monster. My father did it but I came up with that he was the driver of the car! If he left, who would control the car? Strangely, someone control the car after my father left and the person was me! I couldn’t believe that I can drive but I didn’t have the choice because my father was fighting with the monster. For a while, I heard a loud sound and I learned that my father won! The monster died. Finally, everything was fine as if nothing had happened and we continued our trip.

8 則留言:

  1. 一開始就寫出we很奇怪!!不知道是誰!!
    第三行用分詞構句的話主詞就變成是we了!!
    第四行的scare是動詞和名詞!!這裡需要的是形容詞吧!!
    climb應該是往上爬的意思 這裡應該是說要爬出去吧!!
    第六行control要加ed
    第七行can改成could

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  2. I couldn't believe that I can drive but I didn't have the choice because my father was fighting with the monster.我不能相信我會開車但我沒機會因為我爸在跟怪獸戰鬥??

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  3. 1.we drove in the highway
    we很奇怪,還有高速公路是用in嗎?
    2.something must be on our car
    something must be wrong 看起來好一點
    3.第5行的My father用He代替看起來不會那麼累贅
    最後要還要起床,用夢到這個夢的感想當結論句

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  4. 第三行不能用trying八,這樣主詞就是monster了~
    有些字忘記加ed了

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  5. 一開始要先提"主要人物"後來才可以用代名詞喲!

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  6. 應該要些寫出那個we是誰吧
    I couldn't believe that I can drive but I~~這具好像很奇怪不通順

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  7. 一開始就打we好像是包括我們這些在看文章的人- -
    正確打出是誰吧`

    高速公路應該是on吧?

    I felt scare的scare該變形容詞scared吧?

    "I couldn’t believe that ~ the monster."不懂這句意思!

    my father won用won有點怪= =比賽才用won吧!
    該成beat或defeated比較好然後接the monster
    後面那句The monster died.就可刪掉

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