2011年4月20日 星期三

I don't like rainy days.

I like cloudy days, sunny days, and windy days, except for rainy days. It’s because I have to wear a raincoat or carry an umbrella with me if it should rain. I hate to do so. Rainy days cause me not to do any outdoor activity so it is out of the question for me to like rainy days. I remembered that I rode a bike to my friend’s house and it rained cats and dogs on the way to my destination. I didn’t have a raincoat so all clothes of mine got wet because of rain. After I reached the house of my friend, my friend, Peggy, lent to me her shirt and pants. The day was not my day! I’m in a bad mood only when it is a rainy day. I hate to get wet especially in rainy days. Doing everything in a sunny day makes me happy, but doing everything makes me annoyed. Rainy days are the last thing that I would like! If I can choose, I hope that every day is sunny day in stead of rainy day.

9 則留言:

  1. Doing everything in a sunny day makes me happy, but doing everything makes me annoyed. (後面那句要再加in a rainy day)
    I remembered that I rode a bike to my friend’s house and it rained cats and dogs on the way to my destination.(應該要說一下時間吧 不然很奇怪)

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  2. After I reached the house of my friend, my friend, Peggy, lent to me her shirt 兩個my friend重複看起來很怪,然後後面的lent不用to直接lent me her shirt就好了哦

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  3. Rainy days cause me not to do any outdoor activity
    用prevent me from donig outdoor activities such as ...... 後面的such as看你要不要寫, 至於前面我覺得應該這樣改~
    out of the question for me to like rainy days
    用undoubtly that I don't like rainy days
    rain加個the吧(got wet because of rain)
    of my friend用所有格喔!
    my friend, my friend不用重複吧!
    lent to me要用lend me
    Doing everything in a sunny day makes me happy, but doing everything makes me annoyed.這句看不懂ㄟ~是不是有少打~

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  4. After I reached the house of my friend, my friend這句怪怪的唷!!

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  5. I remembered that I rode a bike to my friend’s house and it rained cats and dogs on the way to my destination.那個開始下雨要不要加個時間之類的補充一下不然有點奇怪
    After I reached the house of my friend, my friend, Peggy~. 那個my friend, my friend, Peggy很怪
    Doing everything ~, but doing everything makes me annoyed. 少了在雨天

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  6. 1.I didn’t have a raincoat so all clothes of mine got wet because of rain.
    改成~all my clothes got wet~就好了
    2.After I reached the house of my friend, my friend, Peggy, lent to me her shirt and pants.
    lent her shirt and pants to me 或 lent me her shirt and pants 然後,其實沒提到peggy好像也沒關係...因為你這樣寫有點怪怪的...
    →I reached my freind's house, Peggy, my friend, lent me~. 這樣會不會比較好呢?
    3.Doing everything in a sunny day makes me happy, but doing everything makes me annoyed
    你是不是要加上but doning everything in rainy day makes me annoyed?感覺同一個句子中用了兩次doing everything有點冗贅..可以想看看有沒有其他寫法!

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  7. 更正一下

    上面的第二點要加上after
    →After I reached my friend's house, Peggy, my friend, lent me~.

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  8. 第六行so all clothes
    so前+逗號 clothes前+the
    後面because of rain
    rain前+the
    第七行the house of my friend, my friend, Peggy
    直接打my friend's house就好了吧?
    後面那個重新變成一個句子吧
    那樣很奇怪...沒看過那樣的句子
    I’m in a bad mood only when it is a rainy day.
    這句是假設吧所以前面該變成I'll be in a ...
    還有only要不要去掉,有那個好像是只有雨天才會心情不好
    照常理來說應該不可能只有雨天才會心情不好吧
    Doing everything in a sunny day makes me happy, but doing everything makes me annoyed.
    這句很奇怪前後看不懂
    倒數第二行the last thing+s
    I hope that every day is "a" sunny day in stead of "a" rainy day.

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  9. Doing everything in a sunny day makes me happy, but doing everything makes me annoyed這句很怪

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