Every one is under the stress from each kind of aspect and I’m no exception. How to relieve our stress is of central importance. Every time I’m in bad mood, I watch TV or listen to the music to relax. I’m a student and I have some pressure on my school work; I face the exams everyday. After arriving home, the first thing I do is take a shower because it can help me feel good. Afterward, I will go to my bedroom, turn on my radio, and lie in my bed. I can find my pressure fading when I enjoy listening to my music. This is the best way for me to ease off the stress. Everybody must have his/her own way to alleviate the pressure. Healthy body lies in healthy heart and we should make ourselves healthier. Do you often feel annoyed? I think you have to find ways to let your stress be relieved.
開頭"everyone"連在一起
回覆刪除mood要加a
那句沒有連接詞
可以改成"I watch TV or listen to the music to relax when I am in a bad mood everytime."
schoolwork如果是"功課"的意思`要連一起
the first thing I do有點怪...
do前面加個助動詞讓語意通順點吧!
feel good的good應該改成well或better
feel good好像是爽的意思?
aspect 妳的意思是要當方面嗎? 如果是那可能要加s喔因為它好像是可數的
回覆刪除Every time ~to relax. 這句好像沒有連接詞喔看你要不改成When I'm ~, I always switch my feeling by watching ~.
~the first thing I do is take ~ take前好像要加to
~bedroom, turn on ~ turn 要加ing
(Afterward, I will go to my bedroom~~)應該是不用加will吧!!
回覆刪除(listening to my music)listening to music即可!!
Everybody must have his/her own way to alleviate the pressure. must有點多於
回覆刪除主詞很多都不同要改
1.I’m a student and I have some pressure on my school work; I face the exams everyday.把功課和考試寫在一起比較不會那麼奇怪, on 要改from 吧!
回覆刪除2.After arriving home 改When I arrive home比較好吧!
3. I can find my pressure fading when I enjoy listening to my music. (fade是指顏色漸漸消退,不能用在這裡~想個別的吧!不然就換句話說~)
listen to music 就好了不用加my
回覆刪除第二句Every time I’m in bad mood 我絕得改成every time ''when''~比較好
大家都講完囉~
回覆刪除所以沒什麼問題了
Every time 那句沒錯啦~
回覆刪除every time 可以當連接詞!!
第四行的everyday 要分開!!
第四行 After arriving home, the first thing I do is take a shower because it can help me feel good. 主詞不一樣喲~~所以不可以省略I!!