2011年4月6日 星期三

Describing a Process-(4) how to reduce stress

Every one is under the stress from each kind of aspect and I’m no exception. How to relieve our stress is of central importance. Every time I’m in bad mood, I watch TV or listen to the music to relax. I’m a student and I have some pressure on my school work; I face the exams everyday. After arriving home, the first thing I do is take a shower because it can help me feel good. Afterward, I will go to my bedroom, turn on my radio, and lie in my bed. I can find my pressure fading when I enjoy listening to my music. This is the best way for me to ease off the stress. Everybody must have his/her own way to alleviate the pressure. Healthy body lies in healthy heart and we should make ourselves healthier.  Do you often feel annoyed? I think you have to find ways to let your stress be relieved.

8 則留言:

  1. 開頭"everyone"連在一起
    mood要加a
    那句沒有連接詞
    可以改成"I watch TV or listen to the music to relax when I am in a bad mood everytime."
    schoolwork如果是"功課"的意思`要連一起
    the first thing I do有點怪...
    do前面加個助動詞讓語意通順點吧!
    feel good的good應該改成well或better
    feel good好像是爽的意思?

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  2. aspect 妳的意思是要當方面嗎? 如果是那可能要加s喔因為它好像是可數的
    Every time ~to relax. 這句好像沒有連接詞喔看你要不改成When I'm ~, I always switch my feeling by watching ~.
    ~the first thing I do is take ~ take前好像要加to
    ~bedroom, turn on ~ turn 要加ing

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  3. (Afterward, I will go to my bedroom~~)應該是不用加will吧!!
    (listening to my music)listening to music即可!!

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  4. Everybody must have his/her own way to alleviate the pressure. must有點多於
    主詞很多都不同要改

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  5. 1.I’m a student and I have some pressure on my school work; I face the exams everyday.把功課和考試寫在一起比較不會那麼奇怪, on 要改from 吧!
    2.After arriving home 改When I arrive home比較好吧!
    3. I can find my pressure fading when I enjoy listening to my music. (fade是指顏色漸漸消退,不能用在這裡~想個別的吧!不然就換句話說~)

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  6. listen to music 就好了不用加my
    第二句Every time I’m in bad mood 我絕得改成every time ''when''~比較好

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  7. 大家都講完囉~
    所以沒什麼問題了

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  8. Every time 那句沒錯啦~
    every time 可以當連接詞!!

    第四行的everyday 要分開!!

    第四行 After arriving home, the first thing I do is take a shower because it can help me feel good. 主詞不一樣喲~~所以不可以省略I!!

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