Discussing Cause-1 revised1

I found a job and I had a chance to interview the manager. After talking to the manager, I went home and I discussed the problem whether I should accept this job or not with my parents. This is my first job, so I considered this problem carefully and I decided to accept this job for some reasons after I finished discussing with my parents.

First of all, I have not been a student since I graduated from school. I have to raise myself rather than depend on my parents. Moreover, if I can make money by myself, I will be able to buy more expensive goods. That is, I must have money so that I can buy what I wanted. Additionally, I am satisfied with the salary of this job and I don’t have to wear uniform to work. Most important of all, my parents will become older and older can't work in the future. Thus, I want to reduce their financial burden, so I need to get a job to earn money. To sum up, accepting this job is the better choice for me, so I accept it.