2011年6月1日 星期三

Discussing Cause-2

     Michael Williams opened a small music store selling compact discs on September 5, but he closed his shop about one month later. His shop operated not so well, so he was forced to shut up it. Here were some reasons for that he couldn't run his business.
     First of all, the shop's location was 3 miles away from a shopping center that had two large music stores. A large music stores can provide customers with lots of kinds of music while a small music shop only can launch a few kinds of music to clients. Moreover, most of the people living in Fairfax Apartment were at the age of more than forty;these people trended to listen to lyric music rather than hip-hop or rock. Another reason was that  the shop's opening time.The shop was only open Monday to Friday from 1 to 5 P.M. People had to work during the week except for Saturday and Sunday, and they would go shopping on the weekend. If the shopkeeper wanted to make money, he/she should open the store at that time.  Last but not the least, that Mr.Willians would not accept checks or credit cards could cause clients to reduce their desires of going into the store and purchasing the goods.

8 則留言:

  1. for what/which
    can provide--> could provide
    還有其他一些動詞時態有些錯亂

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  2. A large music stores 為什麼前面有a後面還加s?

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  3. lots of kinds of 改 many kinds of 就不會一直出現of
    to clients是用to嗎?
    was only open 改only opened
    Monday to Friday from 1 to 5 P.M.
    改from Monday to Friday at 1 to 5 P.M.
    (好像比較好~)
    People had to work during the week except for Saturday and Sunday, and they would go shopping on the weekend.
    這句感覺跟上句沒連接到~改說這家店只在星期一到星期五的下午1點到5點開,但人們都較常在假日出門逛街,因為一到五的時間要上班。(這樣會不會比較好)

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  4. *shut up it→ shut it up
    *~reduce their desires of going into the store and purchasing the goods.→~reduce their desires to go into the store ~.
    *~trended to →tend to

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  6. 上面都已經提到了
    我就不打了

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  7. shut up it 應該是shut it up 吧
    32康門+1

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