Many people around the world drink a lot of beverage which is rich in caffeine every day, but they don’t know it may do them harm. In fact, there is much caffeine in various kinds of drinks. As far as I am concerned, I think moderate caffeine is good, but too much caffeine would do people harm. First all, it may cause some physical problems, such as insomnia, nervousness, anxiety, headache, and so on. Furthermore, it may result in nausea or other gastrointestinal problems. That is, maybe those who absorb too much caffeine might want to throw up or have a stomachache. If we have too much caffeine in our body, we will have muscle tremors. According to these reasons, I suggest that people think twice before they drink beverage. We should protect ourselves from being hurt by caffeine.
First all→ first of all
回覆刪除in various kinds of drinks不用kinds of吧?有點畫蛇添足
回覆刪除I suggest that people think twice before they drink beverage這句像泛指所有的飲料而不是含有咖啡因的飲料
First of all
回覆刪除muscle tremors(會不會是muscular)
第8行的might要改成may喔!,這樣前後時態才一致~
回覆刪除我覺得第一句很奇怪~應該說很多人每天都攝取過量的咖啡因這樣比較好吧!