My uncle decided to open a large factory in Acton. As far as I was concerned, I disagreed with this decision for some reasons. One of the reasons was pollution. Although some people considered it a good idea to give opportunities of jobs to residents, I thought that establishing a factory may result in polluted water, harmful air, and industrial noise. These factors had influences on humans’ body. For example, if people breathed dirty air, their health would go from bad to worse gradually. Furthermore, industrial noise could bring about the impact on hearing of people; even it could turn out be hearing impaired. Another reason was the traffic problem. Because of jobs, the town might be crowded by the people’s cars and people. For the reasons above, I objected to this decision.
*As far as I was concerned→我覺得是As far as I am concerned。
回覆刪除* hearing of people of people可以不用寫八?!感覺有怪...
polluted water有點怪應該是 water polluted吧
回覆刪除大致沒有問題
回覆刪除go from bad to worse gradually.(go from bad to worse本來就有越來越糟的意思了,所以gradually有點多餘)
回覆刪除前面要再鋪陳一下~
回覆刪除妳的立場有點奇怪~因為要蓋工廠的是你叔叔~妳應該站在他的立場想吧!而且你也不是這個小鎮的居民~這樣怪怪的~
可以改一下前面的鋪陳
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